OT: Newest Poem | Arthritis Information
here's my newest poem, um i think the ending (is it verse or stanza? i dont use those words normally) i dont like the end tho
any suggestions for the end? good feedback ppl!
(not titled yet. need ideas for that too)
POEM:
All alone
I sit here
Waiting
Thinking
Dreaming
Wishing
Hoping
Praying
Crying
Waiting
For the day that you’ll come home
Without you
It feels like
I’m dying inside
Crying inside
Hiding inside
Someday
You’ll be back
With open arms
I’ll let you in
I’m in love with you
In lust with you
Not lust actually
Just love
Hi Star, I suggest either "alone" or "without you" for the title. Maybe
"I'm in love with you, my life is you, please return, my heart needs/yearns for you."
Just a suggestion for the ending?
janiefx12009-12-18 02:14:28that was an awesome idea for an ending
oh and i did make a title eventually lol, i called the poem: Waiting
but ur title ideas r good too, maybe i'll change it...
I like "waiting " better. Cool. Have fun at the movies and catching up with your friend! Janie.X
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